Monday, October 4, 2010
Shipwreck a la Timothy
That blow was really something! It was probably the worst blow I ever felt, but I stayed calm and didin't panick, but I just feel so sad about all those people that we lost! And poor Phillip he's almost blind, I know, but at least he's alive. I don't think Phillip thinks much of me, but I'm ok with that We're floating around and Phillip just threw up so I'll see you all. Bye!
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Thank you thank you thank you all
ReplyDeleteWhere did the blow come from? How did he get off the ship? Where did he find Phillip? Think about all factors when giving a short narrative of an event - sequence, dialogue, setting, etc. Proof-read carefully - too many errors!
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